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People do not read newspapers anymore. Do you think its a positive or negative trend?

#people #newspapers #trend
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It is widely believed that
people
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 do not read
newspapers
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 anymore. Personally, I strongly think it's negative with
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 view for a variety of reasons. First of all,
people
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 may not know anything about them.
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 means that they don'
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 know situations about politics, the environment or new policies from the government etc. In fact, they may make something wrong, when they didn'
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 update enough of the information.
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, my friend
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doesn'
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 read the
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 from the government about a new insurance policy. They asked for more requirements to submit the document, but he
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 read that update from the newspaper.
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, he
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 know the new rule and when he went to the insurance office to do as before, the officer refused and didn'
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 do it for him.
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,
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 may hear a piece of fake
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, but they couldn'
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 clarify by themself.
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 is because they didn'
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 follow some information from the
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. In fact, they are led in the wrong direction.
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, my brother heard some
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 about the senate, which did some things in my hometown, and his friends told him that the senate is really bad, because he did some bad things.
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, he just listen from his friend and
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 clarify from the newspaper. In conclusion, nowadays,
people
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 do not read
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 anymore is negative. Because they might
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 take care of something. In my opinion, I think we need to encourage
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 to read more
newspapers
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. So that they can catch the
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 and understand more about the situation surrounding them.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Decline
  • Obsolete
  • Digitalization
  • Convenience
  • Instant access
  • Journalism
  • Critical thinking
  • Analysis skills
  • Fake news
  • Misinformation
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