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The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually

The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually
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The table presents information on the opening date,
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route's
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route
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kilometers
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 and the number of
passengers
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 per
year
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 in
millions
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 for Underground
Railroad
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 networks in six major
cities
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.
Overall
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, among all 6
cities
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,
London
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 was the first
Railroad
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 to open whilst Los Angeles was the
last
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. In terms of
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kilometers
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 of
route
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,
London
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 has been the city with the longest
rail
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 distance
whereas
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Kyoto
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's railway spread the least distance. Tokyo has been the most overcrowded city for underground railway
passengers
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 annually, and
by contrast
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,
Kyoto
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 was used by the least number of
passengers
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 in a single
year
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. Among the oldest networks,
London
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 and
Paris
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 railroads dated back to 1863 and 1900, respectively. Having the most distances for their
rail
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system
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 (394
Kilometers
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 in
London
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, and 199
Kilometers
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 in
Paris
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), these
cities
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 contribute to roughly 2000
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millions
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passengers
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 per
year
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 (
London
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 with 775 million
passengers
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 in comparison with
Paris
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's 1191
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millions
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commuters). 27 years after the establishment of
Paris
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rail
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, Tokyo was set up as the third longest
railroad
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system
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 with 155
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kilometers
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 designated to their network. In comparison to all the six major
cities
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 presented here, Tokyo was the most overpopulated
railroad
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system
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, transporting 1927
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millions
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passengers
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 over a
year
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. More current systems include Washington D.C, which opened its
system
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 in 1976,
Kyoto
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 in 1981, and Los Angeles (in 2001). In Washington D.C, 126
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kilometers
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 of
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railroad
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the railroad
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 has had the responsibility for transportation of 144 million individuals
while
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 Los Angeles's 50 million
passengers
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 reach their destinations via a 28
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kilometers
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railroad
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system
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. Meanwhile,
Kyoto
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's 11
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kilometers
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railroad
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route
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, which was the shortest
rail
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route
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 among the 6 major
cities
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, had the responsibility to move only 45
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millions
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city dwellers, making it the
system
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 with the least number of
passengers
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 between the major
cities
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words route, kilometers, passengers, year, millions, railroad, cities, london, rail, kyoto, paris, system with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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