The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million

The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million
The table illustrates figures
of
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for
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underground
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the underground
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railway
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railways
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with
date
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the date
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opened,
kilometres
of
route
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the route
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and
number
of
passenger
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passengers
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per
year
in six different cities.
Overall
, it can be seen that among
six
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the six
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cities,
railway
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the railway
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station in Tokyo was the most popular
while
the only
a
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apply
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smallest
number
of
passengers
per
year
was recorded
in
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Kyoto
Railway
. In terms of
Date
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the Date
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opened. London station launched the earliest among all
while
the newest
railway
was in Los Angeles which just opened in 2001. Other cities both
shown
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show
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the
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a
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similar date of
open
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opening
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in the 19th .
London
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London's
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underground
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Underground
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system led the top
kilometres
of
route
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the route
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by 394 km.
Meanwhile
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Paris, Tokyo and Washington DC
kilometres
has
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gone ranged
around
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from around
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120 to 200 km.
However
, the least
number
of
kilometres
of
railway
received by Kyoto city and Los Angeles, by 11% and 28% respectively. Regarding the
number
of
passengers
per
year
, Kyoto and Los Angeles station
was
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were
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also
the least popular compared to
other
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others
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when registered only 45
millions
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million
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and 50
millions
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million
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passengers
per
year
, respectively.
In contrast
, big
number
of people preferred
railway
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the railway
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in Paris (1191
millions
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million
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passengers
) and Tokyo (1928
millions
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million
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passengers
).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, kilometres, number, year, passengers, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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