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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries traveled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Travelling has become an integral part of our lives where
people
 thrive primarily on commuting and knowing the lifestyles of different
countries
. Some
people
 think that
this
 activity has negatively impacted those
countries
. I disagree with
this
 notion as it renders knowledge among tourists and boosts the economy of the
countries
 travelled to;
however
, I do believe that the tourist attraction
countries
 need more maintenance funds to preserve their artefacts or renowned
places
. To commence with, money spends on leisure activities goes in the form of tax to the government of foreign
countries
 which boosts their economy.
In other words
, higher officials get more monetary funds to utilise in the improvement sectors of their societies.
for example
, Australia is considered the best tourist excursion as it provides eye-catching scenic views and mind-boggling experiences to travellers.
Thus
, these
countries
 charge high paying rates which proliferates their own economy.
Additionally
, by visiting numerous
places
, the public gets exposure and they become capable of understanding the culture and traditions of the country they visit.
Moreover
, they learn new skills and ideas from these
countries
 and start applying those things in their own life to make them better.
On the contrary
, travelling has put a burden on these
countries
 as the more
people
 they invite, the more facilities they require to maintain their service standards.
Also
, they need to keep an eye on the activities of visitors to ensure that they will not harm the beauty of their country by any of their activities.
For instance
, it was reported by a recent survey in America that it took around 1.5 million dollars to preserve and save the originality of their historic
places
 and ancient monuments. In conclusion, it is not at all wrong for Western
countries
 that
people
 from different backgrounds visit them for pleasure;
nonetheless
, it is the responsibility of the government and humans to take proper care of the
places
 and amenities they are exploring.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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