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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is undeniable that
education
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 plays an important role in a nation. Some people argue that the same numbers of
women
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 and
men
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 should be accepted for continuing higher
education
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 in every field. In my opinion, I agree that the same number of
men
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 and
women
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 ought to have a chance to continue their
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education
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 as it will benefit not only individuals but
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 society. A good reason is that by having the same number of both genders in seats of learning, equal opportunity for
men
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 and
women
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 would be accomplished in higher
education
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.At present,
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, a gynaecology major is forbidden to study for male medical doctors in Iran. A large proportion of the population would,
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,be prevented
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 their dreams and the chances of gender discrimination would increase significantly. Another point to consider is that studying an equal number of
men
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 and
women
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 in universities leads to building a better world.
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,
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education
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 has a vital role in the full bloom of one person's merit, skill and knowledge. If both sexes have equal opportunities to continue their higher
education
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, society would benefit from
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 arrangement. To be precise, having a great resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals of both genders will bring greater rewards to the population as a whole.
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, the more educated the society becomes , the more prosperous it
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 be. In conclusion, equal chances for males and females in university in all fields is a must for any nation that values human rights and the success of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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