Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views, give own opinion.
It is undeniable, that modern living conditions make family members work hard. Children are left with grandparents or stay in the kinder gardens in
such
situations. In this
essay, I will discuss both arguments, as well as
my own opinion, which tends to professional baby care in preschools.
On the one hand, there are a lot of adults, who love traditional bringing up and leaving babies with their elders, taking into account, that they are the most reliable people in the world. Furthermore
, grandparents are free and happy to spend their time with grandchildren, not to mention
about family budget saving. For instance
, 90% of preschools are full, which is why elders stay with infants at home even though they are under 60 years old. Thus
, it is a good solution for all dynasties.
On the other hand
, the older generation is not obliged to sit with children, they are continuing their own lives and it is better to leave kids in daycare. It is supported by the fact, that babysitters are well-taught and well-organized in terms of teaching and baby-caring. For example
, according to
the law, infant schools are obliged to pass special qualification tests and 100% of specialists are trained once a month and have a special educational level. Statistics show that all the kindergartens pass them successfully. As a result
, a child is always busy and gets qualified care.
To conclude
, the above-said two points of view are correct in some instances. However
, I believe that a professional baby caring system gives more security and development, and grans still can be visited at the weekends.Submitted by 1arkanta on
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