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Some people think visual images (like photographs,videos) can tell information more accurately in a news story, while others think they are not reliable sources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the rapid development of modern technology, in the journalism industry, many journalists tend to use visual images to complete the story for they prefer its accuracy,
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 some people doubt its authenticity . On the
one
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 hand, compared with text description, visual images demonstrate the process more accurately and directly. The invention of cameras allows the details and the course of incidents to be recorded by means of photos and videos , thereby acting as more convincing
evidences
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pieces of evidence
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 in
journalism
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 industry.
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, compared with the monotonous and subjective description given by reporters, readers can be better informed about the beginnings and ends via visual images.
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, once a journalist wrote a report to set up the miner donation.
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, it didn’t receive much attention from the public until he made a
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 recording
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 workers’ daily routine in the tough working environment,
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 the illness they have to endure, which
then
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 arouse
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 huge impact on the public. Since
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, ordinary people started to concern about the health of the workers and gradually donate
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 industry.
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, visual imagines might be misrepresented in inaccurate manners.
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 of the ways is isolation, sharing a brief clip from a longer
video
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 creates a false narrative that does not reflect the event as it occurred. Take the point-of-view
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 as an example, it only
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one
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 angle of a story
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 of objectively demonstrating events.
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,
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 of the methods. To skew reality and deceive the viewers, posters might use cropping, changing speed even deleting or adding visual information to alter the frames of the
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. As far as
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 am concerned,
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 visual information has several merits, it is high time that we should distinguish white from black to avoid being misled by those incorrect or artificial photos or videos.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visual images
  • photographs and videos
  • convey emotions
  • context
  • details
  • misinterpreted
  • evidence
  • visual confirmation
  • authenticity
  • transcend language barriers
  • global audience
  • international news reporting
  • manipulated
  • edited
  • mislead
  • unreliable sources
  • advanced technology
  • alter images
  • lack context
  • out of context
  • misinterpretation
  • skewed understanding
  • sensationalism
  • dramatic visuals
  • visually engaging
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