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In some contries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In several countries, more
people
 are concerned
in
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 finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. The reason behind
this
 trend is because they want to know if their building is categorised as
historical
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a historical
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 building or not. They can get the
information
 by interviewing the oldest person living in the neighbourhood.
People
 want to know the story of their building mostly for historical
reason
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reasons
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. It can be because it will benefit them in the future.
For
example
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 historical building
is
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usually have higher
price
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prices
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 on sale. The old building usually has
unique
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 design that some
people
 may find
it
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interesting, and they can spend a fortune to have it. Some
people
 want to keep it because they want to preserve the building as
national
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 treasure. The
information
that is
 needed
including
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 its previous owner, when it was built and what was the purpose of the building. By having
this
information
 the current owner can decide what they want to do with the building. The best way to gather
information
 is by talking to the oldest person living in the neighbourhood. Senior citizens usually live in the same area their whole lives so they can give valuable
information
 about the building.
However
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 that old neighbours tend to forget some of the details. If its the case
then
 we can go to
city
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the city
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 council and ask for the city planning map.
This
 way we can compile the data and have more reliable
information
. In conclusion, if we know the history of the building, it makes us appreciate
the
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its value even more.
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