The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.
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The two maps given illustrate the before and after of a nature
museum
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which proposed redevelopment throughout the period from 2010 to 2013.
Overall
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the
museum
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experienced noticeable changes in 3 years,
additionally
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, the most significant one is that the
museum
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had been expanded and the garden
area
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was removed,
while
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the centre of the
museum
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had remained unchanged almost. The garden
area
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with some trees was removed completely and
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of the garden
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, a mammals exhibit, a human origins display, a shop and a cafe were installed.
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, on the west side of the
museum
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, the
mammals'
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mammals
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exhibit was replaced by an ice age and insects sector. The centre of the
museum
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which includes an ocean hall, a lobby, a ticket desk and the entrance,
also
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the dinosaurs
area
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remained just like before,
in addition
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to
this
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, the ocean hall just had been expanded a little which was not as noticeable as other sectors.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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