(2024) You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter, describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir/ Madam Hope you are doing well. I am your student from the

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batch of January. I am writing

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letter to give you feedback about the baking

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that I have done. Actually, I joined

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because it was my passion to learn to make a cake from scratch. I came to know about your cookery classes from one of my friends. The teachers you provided in your classes were excellent. They always give fun activities for baking, so, that students can learn more. The best thing about your classes is that I have learnt all the things by doing these fun activities. After completing

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I made so many cakes on different occasions. Now I want to learn about making Indian cuisine.

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, there is no

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related to

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in your school. I would like to give an idea about starting Indian cookery courses in your school. Hoping to hear soon from you. Yours Faithfully, Jyoti

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Consider providing a more detailed description of what specific aspects of the course you enjoyed the most.

coherence

Try to connect your ideas more clearly by using linking words or phrases for better flow.

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Make sure to separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs. For example, one for your enjoyment, another for your cooking practice, and a third for the suggestion.

task achievement

You expressed your enthusiasm for cooking and the course effectively, creating a positive tone.

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Your request for another course shows initiative and thoughtfulness, which adds value to your feedback.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

163 words

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