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Your class has attended a panel discussion on how to influence people to be more environmentally friendly. You have made the notes below: Ideas for influencing people to be more environmentally friendly: laws and taxes •education media Sorne opinions expressed in the discussion:

Nowadays we are much more aware and alert about the planet’s health,
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 climate change is an increasingly worrying subject that has only grown over the years. In
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 I will discuss two possible
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 that can influence
people
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 to be more environmentally friendly.
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, the government should implement taxes that punish hazardous actions towards the planet, like polluting and littering,
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 not recycling properly.
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 will think twice before doing so, and the money paid can work as funding for counteractive forces.
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, laws should be implemented, these are necessary for setting a new rulebook regarding the fight against climate change. Because,
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 of the day, how can we expect
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 to be caring about the planet if there aren’t any official norms
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, the government could,
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, motivate
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 to use alternative
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 to polluting vehicles by providing funding
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, environmental awareness should be implemented from an early age. If children have good role models they will grow up to be ones themselves,
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, parents and teachers are responsible for the kid's learning and morals.
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 should impart classes and talks dedicated fully to understanding these issues, like engaging courses that motivate children to recycle, buy responsibly, use public transport, etc. In conclusion, even though I believe both of these
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 to be an incentive to engage
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 environmentally, I think governmental actions hold the key to
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 pressing issue.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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