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It has been argued that the emergence of car in human life has brought conveniences rather than problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that car broadcasting has more comforts than drawbacks in daily life. I strongly disagree with
this
 idea because
cars
 are a crucial element that decreases
people
's lifetime. As the Prevalence of Transportation facilities
such
 as
cars
 is the main point that decreases
people
's living time, that does not worth the convenience. Commuters take advantage of
cars
 daily, indirectly threatening their health. They shuttle to work, shopping, or any places they need to travel by the comfort facility, which makes them lazier and
also
 damages the place they live. All
this
 feature impacts
people
's life because it makes them ill. Automobiles affect
people
's weight, resulting in obesity, and air pollution can reduce the quality of society's lifestyles. When
people
 do not have a high-quality period in life, the average of their age goes down. Some
people
 may feel concerned that
cars
 are little harmless inventions that bring comfort to our travelling. The automobile industry provides freedom of movement for
people
. Having
cars
 has made travelling extremely facile and easygoing. Commuters can manage to move to any destination they decide on without the feeling of worry about how they will reach. All the route plans are based on users, and any facility that they need
cars
 is provided.
However
, I believe the comforts motorized vehicles are giving us are causing future society challenges. In conclusion, I am not convinced that
cars
' convenience features overcome the issues they can result in. I believe machines are hidden destructive elements which bring up convivence apparently but have a plethora of disadvantages.
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