the charts below gives information about leves of education in glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010.

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The provided chart illustrates a

varity

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variety

of education levels in

Glascow

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Glasgow

, in 2010. There are two pie charts, one of them shows different

propotions

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proportions

women

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women's

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education levels, and the another one represents

men

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men's

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education levels. what is obvious is,

Scotish

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Scottish

men

are more educated than

women

. speaking of details, 38% of females (all ages) don't have any qualifications

whearase

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whereas

this

part in females (all ages)

are

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only 35%.

Noteable

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Notable

to mention that the majority of people with no qualifications are above 75 years old,

on the other hand

, people under 50 years old had the lowest percentage of the whole. What is more, 29% of all

women

had

university

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a university

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degree but

this

share in

men

is 32%.

In addition

, it is worthy to say that

first

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the first

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place in

this

population is for 24 to 35 years old,

then

35 to 50, and 16 - 24 shared the second place with each other.

To sum up

, it is evident from the statistics,

men

are more willing to get higher educational

degree

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degrees

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than

women

, and

this

is supported by

figures

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the figures

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from

diagram

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the diagram

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4 paragraphs

181 words

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the charts below gives information about leves of education in glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010.

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual persons to address. In other words, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at the international level. To what extents do you agree or disagree?

Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

"Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?"