the charts below gives information about leves of education in glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010.

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The provided chart illustrates a

varity

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variety

of education levels in

Glascow

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Glasgow

, in 2010. There are two pie charts, one of them shows different

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proportions

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women

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education levels, and the another one represents

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men

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education levels. what is obvious is,

Scotish

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Scottish

men

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are more educated than

women

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. speaking of details, 38% of females (all ages) don't have any qualifications

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whereas

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part in females (all ages)

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only 35%.

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to mention that the majority of people with no qualifications are above 75 years old,

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, people under 50 years old had the lowest percentage of the whole. What is more, 29% of all

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had

university

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degree but

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share in

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is 32%.

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place in

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population is for 24 to 35 years old,

then

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35 to 50, and 16 - 24 shared the second place with each other.

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, it is evident from the statistics,

men

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are more willing to get higher educational

degree

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than

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, and

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is supported by

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from

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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the charts below gives information about leves of education in glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010.

Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it? what do you think are the main causes of this problem abd what measures could be taken to solve it ?

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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industries and construction. what measure can be taken to prevent it.

Some people think that the media has the right to publish details of people’s views, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.