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The popularity of news media often has been significantly influential in people's lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with their opinion

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Pessimists believe that newspapers and television channels that broadcast current affairs impose an adverse influence on society these days.
While
 the view makes sense to a certain extent, I personally believe that it tends to be more positive than negative. News outlets have swayed society in many positive ways.
First,
the usefulness of the media, which provides information almost instantaneously, is undeniable. It gives one a feeling that they belong to a small global village.
Secondly
, it fills up the gap between the government and the people. Most people would never meet a prime minister or president in their lives, but anyone regularly watching the news or reading newspapers would undoubtedly know about them.
Furthermore
, the media plays an essential role in spreading different cultures and lifestyles to the modern world. Today, the popularity of exotic cultures and traditions across the globe is the best possible example of the enormous impact.
For example
, readers can easily have access to acquire knowledge about other civilizations where it is at the opposite end of the planet,
thus
 gaining a better understanding of each other. Regardless of the benefits from it, it has many drawbacks regarding the trend. It is a deadly weapon for spreading fake news, directly impacting personal lives.
For example
, some celebrities suffer from depression
due to
 the rumours spread in their names.
Moreover
, there are contents like violence, or prostitution, which are unsuitable for children. They get easily tempted by those, which affects their mental stability.
Thus
 children must have limited access to these. It can
also
 make many of us addicted to it, thereby wasting a great amount of time and effort on something
that is
 less important. In conclusion, the new ways of spreading information grow in importance with time passing, which,
although
 contribute negatively to our society in some aspects, it does more good than harm.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Influential
  • Media bias
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Polarization
  • Accountability
  • Objectivity
  • Commercialization
  • Independent research
  • Public opinion
  • Mental health
  • Cognitive bias
  • Echo chamber
  • Fact-checking
  • Critical thinking
  • News literacy
  • Confirmation bias
  • Editorial standards
  • Media consumption
  • Gatekeeping
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