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The picture below shows how a hot balloon works. Summariez the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The diagram illustrates not only several features comprised in the structure of a hot balloon but
also
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 how it operates.
It is clear that
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 there are 8 key parts involved, three of them are in the envelope, which is the biggest part of the total area.
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, it is run by a heated combination of propane and wind. As can be seen, at the bottom, there is a pair of propane cylinders located in the basket which is used as an accommodation for people. The propane is mixed with wind and heated up in a burner in order to produce flame to make hot
air
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 for the operation.
Next,
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hot
air
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 fills up the inside of the envelope whose skirt is connected to the lower section by a rope and
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 makes the balloon fly since the weight of hot
air
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 is lighter than cool
air
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. Regarding the upper components, it consists of numerous panels, gores and a parachute valve.
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,
this
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 valve allows commuters to control the rate of the escape of hot
air
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 by a self-sealing flap.
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