The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in new Zealand between 1901 and 2101

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in new Zealand between 1901 and 2101
The line graph illustrates the difference in numbers in terms of
birth
and
death
in Newzland within a
two hundred-year
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period from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
the number of births is estimated to fluctuate throughout the given time whilst that of
death
is projected to experience an upward trend. ln 1901, the rate of
birth
was the highest and stood at 1000s.
Then
it fluctuated throughout the years until 1941 when it rose significantly to the 50000s. Afterwards, the standard of
birth
rocketed to nearly 70000s in 1961. From there
birth
rate is estimated to experience a downward trend reaching that of
death
at around 48000s by 2041 and
subsequently
decreasing to about 43000s by 2101. The
death
rate
however
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, stood at 1000s in 1901. It
then
rose steadily to just below 30000s in 2021. After which, it is forecasted to experience a surge to almost 60000sby 2061 from there remain constant.
Subsequently
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decrease slightly to a little below 60000s in 2101.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.

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