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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.
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The given maps illustrate the development of
road
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accesses
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access
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 to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that several accesses to the hospital were built in 2010, and some amenities were
also
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 constructed. Looking at the information in more detail, there
was
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were
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 no changes in Ring
Road
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 which was still located
in
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on
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 the north side of the
city
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 hospital. Two roundabouts
was
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were
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 constructed, which were first to connect
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and
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city
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the city
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 hospital and
second,
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it connected between
city
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road
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 and
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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.
Initially
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, there was only
car
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a car
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 park in 2007 that was parking for staff and
public
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the public
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. In 2010, the parking area was divided into two places where
staff
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the staff
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 car park remained in the same place, and
public
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a public
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 car park was built
in
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on
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 the east side of the hospital.
Initially
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,
bus
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the bus
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stop
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stops
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located
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was located
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in
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on
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 each
sides
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side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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.
Then
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, three years later,
bus
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a bus
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 station
was exist
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existed
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in
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on
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 the west side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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.
This
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 station
connected
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is connected
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with
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by
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 two
roundabots
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roundabouts
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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