The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts give information about the purchasing and drinking of 2 kinds of drinks in different areas of Australia.
Overall
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,
Hobart
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rank
first
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in the category of went to a café and the
Brisbane
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stands
last
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in the group of bought fresh
coffee
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. The
first
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group which is bought fresh
coffee
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in the
last
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4 weeks stands
first
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in
Hobart
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and forms just under 65%.
Moreover
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, Melbourne and Sydney contribute just over 60% and approximately three-fifths respectively.
In contrast
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to
Brisbane
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, Adelaide is lower by 5%. The second group called bought instant
coffee
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in the
last
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44 weeks, stands
first
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in
Hobart
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and it is around 55%.
Moreover
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, Adelaide is approximately 3% lower than
Brisbane
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,
however
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; Melbourne is slightly higher than Sydney. The
last
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category is,
went
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going
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to a café for
coffee
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or tea in the
last
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4 weeks.
Brisbane
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and Adelaide rank
last
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in the same level which is under 35%. Sydney is almost as higher Melbourne, the former accounts for under 45% and the latter contributes over 40% and the remaining just under 40% is allocated to
Hobart
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hobart, first, brisbane, coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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