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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problem, aswell as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language #aswell
It is argued that living abroad where
people
 have to interact with
foreigner
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 can cause difficulties whether in social issues or practical issues.
While
 others support the argument, I disagree with the statement.
To begin
 with, humans are easy to adjust in a new environment.
People
 may
difficult
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to communicate
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 with local
people
 when they just arrive in a new place.
However
, they can tackle
this
probem
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problem
with
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by
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 using body
languages
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language
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 which is a universal sign that can be applied around the world.
Then
, after several months
exposure
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,
new comers
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newcomers
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 can understand what native
speaker
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speakers
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 say, even though it is passive communication.
For example
, exchange programmes that encourage students to live
abrad
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abroad
 with a native family
in
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for
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 three months
,
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 is the
approrpiate
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appropriate
 example to explain. In
this
 programme, students can survive and interact with local families properly
withouth
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without
 having any social
problem
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problems
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.
In other words
, there
is
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 no serious social problems to live in different countries because
people
 will adapt quickly.
In addition
, the advancement of technology helps individuals to communicate in foreign languages. Online dictionaries and AI applications are the tools to assist
human
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humans
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 when they face language difficulties.
Furthermore
, signs, cues, and images in different
language
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languages
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 can be interpreted by Google image. If
new comers
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newcomers
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 bring a smartphone and
internet
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the internet
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 to connect, they might
interprate
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interpret
 the road signs, rules, or other cues that existed in foreign
coutry
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country
 so that they cannot find practical problems. In conclusion, social and practical problems might
be
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happend
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happened
happen
happens
 when
people
 live abroad, but I believe that
those problem
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that problem
those problems
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 will not affect
people
 seriously.
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