The bar chart gives information about the number of social network users in the US from 2008 to 2014.

The bar chart gives information about the number of social network users in the US from 2008 to 2014.
The given bar chart shows the data on the percentage of
people
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usage
of multiple social networking
sites
in the United States during 2014 and 2015. In 2014, most of the American citizens used one site reaching the highest
usage
over the 2 years period by 36%. In the second spot, 23% of people used two
sites
and
also
with a minimal difference, 22%
usage
of no
sites
was recorded.
However
, the
usage
percentage for three, four and five networking
sites
were the lowest
by
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respectively recorded, 12%, 5% and 2%. Following 2014, in 2015, in comparison to the
last
year
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records, the
usage
of one site dropped to 28% but
remaind
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remained
remain
at the first spot for the second year.
Although
,
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the
usage
of no
sites
experienced the same trend
by
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1
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% fall, the percentage of two social networking
sites
increased to 24%. The three
remained
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catagories
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categories
kept the rising trend compared to their records of 2014.
Overall
, the compared
catagories
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categories
experienced approximately
8
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% of
difference
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and
although
some
catagories
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categories
had a falling trend, most of them recorded a minimal rise.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, sites with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.

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