A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Because
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is
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a precious fuel a great deal of
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is spent looking for it. Some people believe that
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is counterproductive as
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is finite so
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we should spend some of
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money
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advancing new power sources. I agree with
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point and think that we should stop
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on
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supplies
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as it is both unsustainable
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harmful to the environment.
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is not only very expensive but it is
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one
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of the most commonly sold commodities on the planet.
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many people invest great sums of
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in locating and extracting it.
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, countries that have been able to find
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supplies
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have seen a huge rise in their GDP and a corresponding rise in their population’s living standards.
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,
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is not a renewable energy
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and
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day the earth’s
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will be depleted.
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reason
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it is not logical for us to continue being dependent on
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and should
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devote time and
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the development of sustainable alternatives. These alternatives already exist in the form of wind, hydro and solar power but need to be invested in to meet the global demand for energy. Another issue with our reliance on
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is the effect that it has on the environment. The burning of fossil fuels like
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is
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of the key causes of climate change.
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many people argue that, rather than looking for new ways of extracting
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, its use should be greatly limited. They argue that, if we do not address the problem now, many parts of the world will be uninhabitable in the future. In conclusion, despite the financial benefit for those that find
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of
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, I would argue that we need to end our reliance on it. The environmental problems that it causes are too great to be ignored and, given that it will
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day be depleted anyway, we need to start using alternatives now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • finite
  • renewable energy sources
  • expenditure
  • compromise
  • sustainable
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructure
  • economic sustainability
  • dependency
  • fluctuating prices
  • stimulate
  • job creation
  • vested interests
  • transition
  • reluctance
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