Historical objects should be brought back to their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is asserted that the ancient items should be given back to the nations
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these belong to.I strongly accord with
this
consideration and will discuss the rationales to prove
this
in upcoming paragraphs. No doubt,if the historical objects would be placed within other countries,the foreigners can get to know about the rich culture
as well as
the history of other Nations.
However
,these things should be returned to
concerned
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country to provide knowledge to local ones, especially
childrenzabout
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children about
the living style of their ancestors.
For example
,ancient 'swords' can give information pertaining to how the ancient people
faught
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fought
caught
in the wars.
As a result
,they can be fruitful to teach locals.
Besides
this
,the economy of
nation
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can be improved provided that antiques would be returned to the concerned region.
In other words
, the original owner country can exhibit the historical items in their museums which will eventually increase the GDP of the nation as
local
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as well as
foreigners will visit these places
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purchasing tickets.
For instance
, 'Kohinoor' which costs
million
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of dollars is in London,but it belongs to India.
Consequently
,it has declined India's economic power.
Additionally
,the statues of gods
such
as 'Lord
buddha
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' can be placed in
concerned
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country's temples and the
privilegers
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privileged
can pay
obesience
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obedience
obeisance
to these.
Also
,they can see how their gods and goddesses used to look
along with
their deeds. In conclusion,
although
antiques placed in other regions' museums can provide knowledge to
the
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foreigners about the rich heritage of other nations,I believe that these should be returned back in order to increase
the
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economic growth
coupled with
providing information to locals about their ancestors.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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