The two maps below show an island , before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island , before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pictures below demonstrate the same
Island
over the years to compare its status before, and after building a set of tourist facilities. It is not difficult to realize that the
island
has made
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significant progress over
the
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time. New facilities
such
as
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, swimming options, and a bunch of accommodations are added. In fact, the
island
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a serious revolution and its appearance makes a
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change. In the first map, the
island
was a useless area without any facility, to attract people to come and spend their leisure time out there. In the second image, the
island
has appeared quite differently, and many options are added to make it a better place to accommodate tourists. The restaurant is placed next to the campsite and the reception is in the central area, so that people can achieve it easily, and
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the left-hand side, the beach has been prepared for swimmers and families to experience the feeling of joy and relief.
Furthermore
, there are some connecting pathways, including footpaths, and vehicle tracks to enhance the accessibility.
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