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Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many thinkers believe that government authorities should prefer healthcare facilities over education, infrastructure and others. I think that equal importance should be given to all the significant departments. There would be a balanced growth in the economy if all the departments are given equal weightage. If the governing bodies allocate more funds to the health department
instead
 education, it might happen competent students may not get scholarships and bursaries to achieve higher studies which would bring anxiety and distress among them, and they may not afford the fees to enrol in the programs of their desire,
as a result
, it would ruin their future.
For example
, Canada is allocating almost equal resources to major areas so that the country can progress
overall
.
As a result
, there should be equal treatment for the key areas of the economy. Prioritizing only the healthcare system may lead to better treatments with specialized techniques and spending more money on campaigns leading to more awareness towards one’s health;
however
, to maintain a healthy life, the environment should
also
 be taken care of. If an environment minister does not have any effective policy and resources to reduce the emission of greenhouse gases, the
overall
 biodiversity may collapse in the upcoming future as pollution in the air leads to climate change and global warming.
For example
,
due to
 changes in climate, Canada has experienced the highest number of wildfires
this
 summer. So, it is the responsibility of the council to come up with
the
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effective policies and give preference to all the dominant fields which can lead to the holistic development of the country. In my opinion, a country can grow if all the important sectors are given priority without any discrimination. So, the governing authorities should spare equal time and resources for the dominant sectors of the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health infrastructure
  • social determinants of health
  • fiscal allocation
  • government expenditure
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • life expectancy
  • pandemic preparedness
  • health equity
  • social safety net
  • holistic approach
  • non-communicable diseases
  • cross-sector collaboration
  • socioeconomic status
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