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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart gives information about how many
people
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 purchase and drink
coffee
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 and tea in
five
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 different regions in Australia namely Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart.
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, it is clear to see that in the
last
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 4 weeks,
people
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went
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who went
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 to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 for
coffee
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 and tea are the highest but in
Adelaide
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. The number of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 is the lowest in these
five
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 places. To probe deeply, these
five
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 cities had roughly half of
residents
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the residents
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 purchasing instant
coffee
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, and the figures in Hobart and
Brisbane
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 were almost 55
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percent
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per cent
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. In comparison, the proportion of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 was never as high as 45
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percent
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per cent
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 in any of the
five
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 cities, with those in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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, both at nearly 35
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percent
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per cent
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, less likely than those in the other three cities to do so. Most inhabitants in Melbourne, Sydney, Hobart, and
Brisbane
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 visited a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea, at approximately 64, 62, 61, and 56
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively,
whereas
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 just under half of residents in
Adelaide
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 did so.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, five, brisbane, adelaide, percent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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