It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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Humans
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life
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by taking risks or
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in
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the safe
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.
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the disadvantages might huge depends on how big the risk
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take, I agree that
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should be brave and face some challenges in their
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. On the one hand, choosing a risky decision will unlock new problems, especially in
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professional
lives and personal lives.
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, not every
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is comfortable with the
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pressure
it will give, and it might trigger an individual’s anxiety.
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, in
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a professional
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setting, most
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will choose the more stable career ladders. Same
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entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur
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who
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to play safe by selling very general products. Even though there are many motivators who encourage them to take risks in order to level up, they feel comfortable and unwilling to try other paths.
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, if
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way of thinking
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a culture, it will kill creativity and
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to reach something big in
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life
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, either
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leap in career or personal
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, is come from
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a risky
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decision. In fact, individuals who
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in their
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would not settle for less and try to reach more than
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the bare
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minimum of
society
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standard
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standards
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. Marriage,
for instance
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, is a scary thing for
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nowadays,
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however
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they should take a big leap to reach that kind of happiness. They ought to try beyond their comfort
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due to
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achieving something big.
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, workers suppose to be brave and do something out of the box as it could unlock bigger opportunities not only in private
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,
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in professional
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settings
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. Their new habit
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taking action outside
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the comfortable
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zone
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will develop their sense, which can
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widen their possibility to predict the right moment when they have to stay in the
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or not. In conclusion,
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decide
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something which has
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a big
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possibility to fail will trigger anxiety and might lead to a failure, it will widen
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people
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opportunities
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to be successful in
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life
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. I remain firmly
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convinced
that the negative output could be tackled by managing risks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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