IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

Your employer is considering ways to adjust work hours and reduce them overall. You have been asked to provide suggestions on how to implement this change. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter Explain why you think reducing work hours is a good idea. Suggest how the work hours could be reduced. Describe how these changes could benefit the company.

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Dear Mr.Brown, I am writing to you to explain my suggestions about your asked modifications of my time table. As you know, because of the recent layoff program of our company, our team has been under pressure for the
last
 3 months. It has brought about some family issues and I have been criticised by my family for not devoting enough time to them. I think a new approach should be taken toward working hours. It would be fine if I work on holidays occasionally,
However
, I would be in trouble if I should do it for two weeks in a row.
furthermore
, implementing a flexible time regulation enables us to avoid morning and evening traffic congestion. The aforementioned measures make a considerable contribution to employees' work-life balance and help them to be more fresh and concentrated during their working hours. In
this
 respect, the company itself can benefit from those new methods because the staff can be more productive and in the long run, the frequency of human errors can decline and the consequent customer satisfaction promotes the company's position and reputation. Regards, John Smith
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suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and suitable tone throughout, effectively addressing the employer.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and professionally done.
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