Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Societies are
being
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the much same. Because
individuals
can buy similar
product
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products
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anywhere around the world. In my view,
this
is a negative development. Because everyone knows that buying the same
things
is boring for them.
Therefore
, they often change
decisions
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. Nowadays, people are almost buying the same
things
which need for themselves. So, plenty of
countries
are becoming more similar.
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cause
that
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they do not try to search for new
things
, and
also
they are getting insensitive day by day. It seems to me that if
this
situation goes on, there will be a big impact on many country's
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in the future. Because a developing society depends on how to improve
their
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products.
In addition
, changing
same
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things
which are being used by
individuals
to consume
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an essential role during their carer.
On the other hand
, becoming more similar among the other
countries
leads to stopping the conflicts. As far as I am concerned,
that is
a
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one of the positive developments in
this
essay.
However
, we should not forget that being more similar amount
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societies will not increase the
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of life
,
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if
this
situation carries on. When it comes to buying the same
things
. Many people say that
this
method helps us how to live
easy
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during our lives. But, I would not agree with
this
methodical process. To my mind,
individuals
can afford
things
more than that. In conclusion, buying the same products which buy
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people'need
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people need
be
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very necessary for creating their future, and
also
becoming more similar amount of the
countries
has a big impact on improving
in
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its
of
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plan
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. In short,
this
method will be forever negative development for
countries
and
its
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individuals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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