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In today's society, the internet plays a significant role in communication. Some believe that it has brought people closer together, while others argue that it has led to social isolation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Internet
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 has been a crucial part of modern day-to-day life for communicating both at personal and professional levels.
People
use
 it to communicate virtually with their loved ones who are miles apart, which would not have been possible without the
internet
. Some like to think that
people
 are brought closer
due to
 its
use
,
however
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 others think the opposite that it has been a cause for the lack of actual social interaction.
This
 essay discusses both arguments and suggests why moderate
use
 of
internet
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 is crucial to reap its benefits. With
internet
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the internet
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 being accessible to general
people
, it has been extensively used for communication.
People
 can video chat with their relatives and friends who are thousands of miles apart in some other part of the
world
. We are a few taps away from being connected with anyone around the globe. In the modern
world
, when families are living in different parts of the
world
,
this
 feeling of being always in touch with the ones they care about is so impactful. In
this
 regard,
people
 consider the web to be a gift of some kind.
On the other hand
,
this
 capability of the
internet
 has some downsides too.
People
 complain that their children have become so attached to
this
 technology, they connect with others all around the
world
 virtually but have been lacking in their actual social interaction with their family, friends and
people
 in the surrounding. They normally avoid talking to
people
 in real and are always busy with their smart devices. In some extreme cases, it has
also
 led to serious health situations like depression, and anxiety, being a problem rather than a solution. In conclusion, I think moderation is the key when
its
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 comes to reaping
out
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the benefits of
internet
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. One should not
use
 it to the point he/she becomes addicted.
People
 have to be mindful about using it moderately and
also
 parents have to guide their children not to let them
use
this
 technology accessively.
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