Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives?

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modern human society, the majority of people across the
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that possessing either a house or an apartment is more
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to the landlord for one. In my opinion, I
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your milestones is owning a house.
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you more confident but
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developing your career and family. Because having a homestead is
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to help you conquer, complete the goals you aim for in the future.
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entrepreneurs all come up from empty hands.
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develop themself, from saving
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a home, they are fully capable of
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target in their life. And the next benefit of having a home is you can be free to decorate any you want. You can
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whatever you like without being hindered by anyone.
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be bothered by everyone so if you have a private space for
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, you can feel comfortable and unconfined to do what you like without being scrutinized or noticed.
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the other hand, having
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of
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expenditures. And sometimes, you must pay some fixed
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fee or V.A.T tax. And it
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other odd expenses, so you need to calculate carefully to avoid losing
money
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  • heritage
  • continuity
  • progress
  • innovative
  • cultures
  • societal advances
  • integration
  • cultural tapestry
  • ideologies
  • reconciled
  • evolved
  • adapted
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