Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which cause many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, industrialization has affected even the

food

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industry, and instant

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has become more and more popular. The main ingredient in these products is

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making various foods and drinks. Since

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would lead to lots of diseases, some believe that products should be unaffordable to eliminate

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consumption.

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health problems related to

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intake

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as obesity, diabetes, and hypertension are threatening human health, I partially disagree with the former opinion because of the reasons that I will mention in

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essay. The group who are in favour of banning

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the consumption

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by increasing the price of manufactured meals are concerned about the negative consequences that

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has on our bodies. Despite the fact that

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is the main source for meeting our

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need for energy, its over-intake would cause different problems

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as obesity, diabetes and other chronic diseases. To illustrate, one bottle of soda contains more than ten spoons of

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. Our body would utilize just one spoon of that carbohydrate and its extra consumed

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might be stored as fat in our body and leads to overweighting.

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, considering those negative influences, consuming

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should be limited.

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, since manufactured

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is more accessible and

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affordable, it would be the only

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that communities specially under-privileges in some parts of the globe consume.

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, by increasing

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prices, we would strip groups of people depending on these

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supplies.

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, the price of one soda is almost half of a fresh juice. so, with the financial recession that most people are struggling with, it would be more likely that people choose soda

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of fresh juice.

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, based on the arguments cited above, I tend to partially disagree with the statement, because It would not be a sustainable solution for the issue.

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, it is the government's responsibility to make the public aware of the negative impact of excessive

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intake by educating them.

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, authorities should make policies to fall the cost of healthy

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to encourage individuals to purchase fresh healthy vegetables and meat.

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Topic Vocabulary:

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excessive sugar consumption
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