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You recently attended a workshop that was useful, but you were not satisfied with some parts of it. Write a letter to the organisers of the workshop. In your letter: explain what the workshop was about describe what you liked about the workshop say what you did not like and suggest improvements

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my satisfaction with attending your
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 recently. I would like to appreciate your efforts and the hard work you put in throughout the
workshop
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. I must say that the topic of
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 activity was far more related to a locality. As many individuals are now diagnosed with 'Diabetes Mellitus', they require some health education to cope with
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 condition.
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 the
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 presented detailed information regarding the management of the consequences of diabetes, I experienced that the
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 lacked essential ways of presentation,
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 as visual aids or graphics. These would definitely be proven effective in providing health talks to the public. Here, I would like to make some recommendations about
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 project. You could involve the professionals to present
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 situation in a constructive way, as they are experts in
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 specialised field.
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, integrating essential programs and installing required gadgets would compel the audience significantly. I appreciate your time and kind consideration. Yours faithfully, ABC

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task response
Make the main idea of the workshop clear at the start and add one or two simple examples of what you learned.
structure
Write in 2-3 short paragraphs: first the good points, then the bad, with a small fix, then a short end.
language
Use easy words and short sentences. Use links like and, but, also, so to join ideas.
organization
Keep one idea in each paragraph and start a new paragraph for a new point.
tone
Polite and respectful tone
structure
Good closing line
content
Covers both good and bad points
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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