The top priority of business is making money, they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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almost
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most
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businesses
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have the purpose of making
money
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, it
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that they did not need to have any public responsibilities.
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my opinion,
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disagree totally
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idea and
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writer will give all the
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. On the one hand, the idea
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don't need to have any public responsibilities alo right apart. Because it can help a
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of people have a job to earn
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and create many job
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opportunities
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lead
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to an improvement in
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value in
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it can make a
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of
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and be
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in
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short time.
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, there are a host of compelling reasons as to why
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is
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there are some
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dump
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that dump
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a
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of waste or chemistry waste into the river and lake. Most of the factory, they usually waste
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varity
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variety
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the environment, which
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to
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extreme air pollution. Mostly, the company often use a
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of
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to transport
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large amount of product. It
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bring
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many conditions to destroy the
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environment
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reason is there are many
bussinesses
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businesses
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that don't
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have any philanthropic actions. Because of generation profits, they can sell
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anything
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to
consumer
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consumers
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, even banned substances or
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weapons
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. It can lead to a
lot
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of harmful
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to
social
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society
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and
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influence
the
safeness
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of people.
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, it
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the
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environmnental
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environmental
degradation and
money
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be
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priceless.
Inconclusion
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,The top
prioty
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priority
of
businesses
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is making
money
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, which isn't incorrect. But to guarantee
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safe public and stable
enconmical
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economical
comical
value,
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also
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need to have social responsibilities. I would contend
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with that
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idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Profitability
  • Ethical practices
  • Economic growth
  • Brand image
  • Consumer backlash
  • Long-term success
  • Sustainability
  • Ethical labor practices
  • Community involvement
  • Legal requirements
  • Compliance policies
  • Innovation
  • Stakeholders
  • Social welfare
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