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The top priority of bussinesses is making money and they do not have social responsibilities to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#priority #bussinesses #money #responsibilities
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It is often argued that the most important
goals
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 of
bussinesses
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businesses
 is profit
whereas
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 other people say that companies have to have public
responsibilities
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.
This
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writter
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writer
 is of the second opinion and will explain why during the following essay. On the one hand,
company
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the company
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 should not refuse
thier
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their
responsibilities
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 as it can cause a lot of hassle
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 as
lawsuit
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.
In addition
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,
this
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 silly action can put the customers down and
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the
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 income. For the next
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, lack of
responsibilities
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 will cause moral
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degeneracy
. In reality, the terrifying death of radium happened in 1916, New
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 was the result of the insensitivity of the company owner.
On the other hand
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, we
also
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 have to think
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 another
reason
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 why
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comoany
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company
have
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 to do that. For the first
reason
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,
bussinesses
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businesses
 need money to fill up
thier
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their
lost
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loss
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 at the beginning. When we start up a
bussiness
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business
, we may need refunds for other activities
such
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 as employing, manufacturing,
buying
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and buying
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mateirals
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materials
,... and it
is very need
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 to retake the money again. For the second
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,
company
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the company
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 need more money for
other potential project
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 so it is no doubt that some of them ignore
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their
responsibilities
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. In conclusion,both ideas
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its
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their
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 own advantages for a few individuals but
i
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 still agree
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that
 the second opinion is
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apply
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better, because of those reasons mentioned above.
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