Some companies require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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share the same thought that possessing a house or an
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discussed
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Firstly
,you don’t have to worry about rent money which
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monthly or annually.Because of the fact that it
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you feel comfortable when you can get out of the pressure but
also
saves
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expense.
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you can use your
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money to buy a car or essential individual equipment
Secondly
,you can design your own house or decorate your
apartment
.
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possess house,it will show your style of you and make you more special.Followed by
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your
apartment
,when you purchase furniture and paint colour on a wall,it
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your
apartment
more spectacular.
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which you paint and decorate with
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will pay attention to your guess.So it
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an interesting
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them All in all, it is extremely crucial for everyone to have
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ownership of
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accommodatiom
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accommodation
as it is proved to be far more beneficial in
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term even if we have numerous adversaries to overcome
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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