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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.
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The line graph demonstrates the number of international tourists who visited 4 different places in the world over a 15-year
period
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. As can be clearly seen from the graph the most noticeable feature is the proportion of people attracted by North
America
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.
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, at the beginning of the examined
period
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 North
America
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 welcomed 70
million
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 tourists.
This
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 specific figure experienced a steady increase until 2000 and
then
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 decreased slightly until 2005 at approximately 80
million
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 visitors.
According to
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 the second most popular destination which was Central and East Europe, in 1990 it started with a sudden rose for the first 5 years and it continued increasing less intensively until the end of the examined
period
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 which reached an equal proportion as North
America
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. It is
also
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 worth noting that South-East Asia underwent a slightly upward trend throughout the years. Ultimately, Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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 were equally represented ranging from less than 10
million
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 arrivals in 1990 to up to 10
million
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 in 2005.
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, it is evident from the graph that North
America
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 was the most popular destination for the most examined
period
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,
whereas
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 all figures rose throughout the years.
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