in many parts of the world, children and teenagers are spending more and more of their time indoors. what do you think are the cause of this problem? what measures could best be taken to solve it?

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Several
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researchers
said that nowadays these two groups of society (
children
and teenagers) are
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at home most of the time. It may be because of many elements but we can use
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measurements
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people
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social media and their mobile phones
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children
and teenagers.
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, there are myriad components like gadgets, video games, TV and so on. So, they do not think that it is exciting to leave their modern bedroom in order to face
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difficulties outside and try to socialize with others.
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, they become lazy and may
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parents should play their own role. So, they have to plan for their afternoons or holidays.
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, they have to play sports or
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a good vacation trip to force them to get out of their comfort zone and be aware of their restriction
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technology usage.
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,
children
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have a fear
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being outside. Because
,
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post pandemics of covid 19 have forced all the
people
to stay at home to be safe. So, it paints a big red line in our
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to not
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so close to each other.
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their social ability
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children
. But, all the
people
have
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and there is no evidence of covid
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various
virus
. So, governments and parents should ensure them that nothing will happen if they exit their
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In conclusion,
children
and teenagers are in their houses which is a big deal. But, we can use different methods to keep pushing them to have communication with others and search for the meaning of life outside.
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