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It is important fo people to take risk, both in professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disavantages?

#fo #people #risk #lives #risks #disavantages
Nowadays there are a
lot
 of different
subjects
 in school. Students learn
subjects
, connected with Art, Math and languages, but
people
 should learn
science
subjects
.
Firstly
, learning information, connected with
science
, can help
people
 to know something interesting and new about
them
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themselves
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, their planet and animals. Some of the facts can definitely take one's breath. Scientists like their job only because of their crazy interest
to
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in
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 our eternal world.
Secondly
, there are a
lot
 of ways to earn a
lot
 of money. A
lot
 of scientists and explorers have become rich only because of
science
, but they worked very hard. That's the disadvantage of
this
 route.
Thirdly
, knowing
science
 can help
people
 to stay fit and to be healthy. A
lot
 of
people
 have problems with their physical or mental health, that's why, they should learn it to decide these troubles and to help
to
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other
people
.
To sum up
, learning
science
 can help
people
, but it's only their choice, what to learn. All
subjects
 are important in
human's
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human
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 life. The more person
learn
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learns
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,
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apply
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 the better they feel.
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