In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through the internet that children can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently,
due to
the development of technology, more and more
people
believe that it is convenient to study at home thanks to the diversity of information on
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. During Covid-19,
this
kind of learning
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to prefer
than
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the traditional method.
However
, in my opinion, schools are still a crucial factor for students
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many reasons.
Although
it can be denied the benefit that
Internet
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brings to education
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during the pandemic,
young
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generation can deal with mental problems. One of them is the anti-social which leads
people
scared to connect with strangers,
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to
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have friends. Because most
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courses will be taught through videos which had been recorded before. So it is less opportunity for students to make friends. Though there is still available for adolescents to study an online class which
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through a platform
such
as
a
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google meet or Microsoft
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, suitable for many
people
to learn the lessons at the same time with the tutorial of teachers. But
this
method does not have much time or any opportunity for the learners to engage other members.
Additionally
, the
Internet
can not replace teachers in school because it is just a programme and hardly adjusts the lessons base on the ability of each student.
In other words
, the tutors not only teach pupils about the knowledge
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related to the subject but
also
the soft skills.
This
is a significant aspect that children should be trained by adults like parents and teachers in school
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through machines.
For instance
, during primary school, students are not only taught how to speak and spell the language or calculate the numbers but
also
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peers and the elder. In conclusion, I totally disagree with the opinion that
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can replace schools simply because it has diverse information.
Although
it has many benefits, it can create drawbacks for young
people
in mental health or lack of soft skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • structured learning environment
  • self-paced learning
  • personalized learning
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic disparities
  • qualifiable educators
  • motivation
  • tailored teaching methods
  • media literacy
  • critical thinking
  • routine
  • discipline
  • extracurricular activities
  • holistic development
  • well-rounded education
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