The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

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line graph illustrates player numbers in

basketball

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tennis

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badminton

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, and

rugby

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over 20 years.

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, there was an upward trend in the number of people who play

tennis

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while

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it is the opposite of those in

rugby

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In addition

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, the participant numbers in other sports,

basketball

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and

badminton

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, remained stable during the observed period. In 1985, the

tennis

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and

rugby

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players were 150 and 250 respectively. After 20 years,

tennis

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participants rose remarkably by half, to 225 in 2005, and surpassed ruby in 1995 to become the most favourite sport. On the opposite trend,

rugby

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plunged five times from the most popular sport at 245 in 1985 to 50, equal to the lowest position of

badminton

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On the other hand

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, the minor favourite sport was

badminton

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with 50

while

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the number for

basketball

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stayed at 75 until the end of 2005.

However

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, no change was seen in the participants of both

badminton

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and

basketball

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over the observed period.

Badminton

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witnessed a slight fluctuation.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words basketball, tennis, badminton, rugby with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

participants
participation
trend
significant increase
decrease
stability
popularity
regional interest
key trends
peaks
troughs
local leagues
school programs
media influence
public health initiatives
availability of facilities
competitive success
fluctuations
impact
major tournaments
notable players
local clubs
coaching programs

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