The bar graph bellow depicts information about the average hourse of unpaid work per week one by pepople in different categories.
The given bar graph illustrates the amount of time married
women
and married men
doing unpaid work
in three different categories.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that married women
do unpaid work
longer than married men
, and it seems that the more women
have children
, the more working hours
they do. In contrast
, the amount of time men
working decreases considerably when they have more children
.
Looking at the information in more detail, married women
who do not have children
work
30 hours
, while
men
in the same category only do half of the hours
of women
do. Subsequently
, the working hours
rose to nearly 50 hours
a week for women
who have 1-2 children
. In contrast
, there is a slight decrease for men
in the same category to 14 hours
.
With respect to families who have 3 and more children
, women
work
approximately 55 hours
a week, while
almost one-third hours
the men
do the home chores in this
condition.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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