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The bar graph bellow depicts information about the average hourse of unpaid work per week one by pepople in different categories.

The bar graph bellow depicts information about the average hourse of unpaid work per week one by pepople in different categories.
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The given bar graph illustrates the amount of time married
women
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 and married
men
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 doing unpaid
work
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 in three different categories.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that married
women
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 do unpaid
work
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 longer than married
men
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, and it seems that the more
women
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 have
children
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, the more working
hours
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 they do.
In contrast
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, the amount of time
men
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 working decreases considerably when they have more
children
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. Looking at the information in more detail, married
women
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 who do not have
children
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work
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 30
hours
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,
while
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men
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 in the same category only do half of the
hours
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 of
women
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 do.
Subsequently
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, the working
hours
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 rose to nearly 50
hours
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 a week for
women
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 who have 1-2
children
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.
In contrast
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, there is a slight decrease for
men
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 in the same category to 14
hours
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. With respect to families who have 3 and more
children
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,
women
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work
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 approximately 55
hours
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 a week,
while
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 almost one-third
hours
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 the
men
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 do the home chores in
this
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 condition.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, work, children, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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