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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.
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The map illustrates the town of
Norbidon
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Norbidon's
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 Current industrial area and
planned
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the planned
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 forthcoming development of the Site.
overall
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, It is most
noticable
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noticeable
 that the Norbiton area
have
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has
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 planned to change a great deal
as
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by
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 introducing new
facilities
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.
Firstly
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,
elimination
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the elimination
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 of factories and
introduction
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the introduction
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 of
Housing
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a Housing
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Scheme
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 and recreational
facilities
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.
Secondly
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, they have planned to erect new infrastructures too.
To begin
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 with, The Norbiton industrial area presently
it
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apply
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has a roundabout and two roads to
east
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the east
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 and South side of the map. Numerous factories
are Surrounded
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have Surrounded
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 the roads.
The future
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Future
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 development depicts
the
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apply
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growth. and modification of introducing new
facilities
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.
Furthermore
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, a new bridge
have
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has
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 planned
to Construct
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constructed
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 on top of
river
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the river
a river
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, and a road Connected to the bridge. Next to
river
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the river
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 planned
a
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an
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 enlarged housing
scheme
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. A new road
have
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has
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 been planned to Construct to the northwest and a housing
Scheme
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to
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is to
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 be added end of it and
few
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a few
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 housing
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scheme
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schemes
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planned
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are planned
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 to build parallel to it.
A numerous
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Numerous
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facilities
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planned
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are planned
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 to establish,
such
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 as Shops
in
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on
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 the southwest side , a medical centre
in
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on
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 the southeast side and a playground middle of
roundabout
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the roundabout
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 and
school
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a school
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 , and
few
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a few
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 housing
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scheme
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schemes
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 across it.
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, a new
mini roundabout
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mini-roundabout
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 will be added beneath the main road, the previous roundabout
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities, scheme with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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