People are responsible for their happiness. Others feel happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
A significant number of individuals argue that pursuing
the
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apply
happiness
is their own obligation, where as
other communities show a different view that it will depend on numerous aspects Correct your spelling
whereas
in
their Change preposition
of
life
. According to
this
issue, I would like to discuss the leading factors of those views and provide my own perspective about
creating Change preposition
on
our
happy Change the word
a
life
.
To begin
with, there are two reasons why people
think that the joyness
can be created Correct your spelling
joys
by
their own. Change preposition
on
Firstly
, creating happiness
can be done by people
self by doing diverse intentional activities. In this
life
, there are
Change the verb form
is
huge
number of hobbies that could be done without any restrictions and it will Change the article
a huge
the huge
result
the Add the preposition
inresult
fromresult
happiness
, for example
playing soccer in
the pitch with some Change preposition
on
of
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apply
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the colleges
colleges
or Replace the word
colleagues
wathing
movie series all day long in the house. Correct your spelling
watching
In addition
, reaching some achivements
is one of Correct your spelling
achievements
things
that Add an article
the things
creating
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creates
happiness
and it can be reached by own
effort. Correct pronoun usage
your own
For instance
, when a person want
to buy a branded bag, she has to show her effort in their job to earn money and it becomes her own responsibility to do it.
Change the verb form
wants
On the other hand
, there are some factors that affecting
individuals to pursue their joys. Change the form of the verb
affect
Initially
, personal
economic situation gives the limitation of Add an article
the personal
people
to get what they want in their life
. To illustrate, if a man do
not have sufficient money in his bank account, he will not Change the verb form
does
has
Change the verb form
have
an
ability to buy a new car. Change the article
the
Secondly
, some physical conditions also
provide restrictions to pursue joyness
. Correct your spelling
joyless
For example
, a blind person does not has
opportunities to enjoy a movie or a football match Change the verb form
have
in
television.
To summarize, getting Change preposition
on
the
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apply
happiness
can depend
both Add the preposition
ondepend
by
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on
people
self and Change noun form
people's
variety
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a variety
aspects
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of aspects
in
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of
life
. In my own opinion, I believe that joyness could be reach
by ourselves. Change the verb form
be reached
Instead
of depending some
kind of conditions in Change preposition
on some
life
, as a human who able
to think, we can design our happy Add a missing verb
are able
life
by creating some interesting activities, such
as playing games or sport
.Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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