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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The given line
graph
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 illustrates the changes in the ownership of electrical appliances,
while
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 the accompanying
graph
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 gives information on how many
hours
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 per
week
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 households spend spent for chores over a 99-year
period
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 in a specific country. As can be clearly seen from the first line
graph
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 the most significant trend is observed in the
percentage
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 of households that used refrigerators in the most
period
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 of the examined
years
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.
In particular
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, zero households used refrigerators in 1920,
whereas
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 over the
years
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 the figure increased suddenly until its stability at 100%. At the same time, the second most popular appliances were washing machines and vacuum cleaners. At the beginning of the examined
period
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, the aforementioned trends were represented equally with the former reaching 40% of individuals' use,
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 the latter stood at 30%. In the next
years
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, the washing machines' trend underwent some variations until the end of the
overall
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period
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, whilst the vacuum cleaner
percentage
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 surged until it levelled off at the same
percentage
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 as the
percentage
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 of the refrigerator in 2019.
According to
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 the second
graph
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, the most noticeable feature is that in 1920 the population tends to be occupied with housework frequently during the
week
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. To exemplify, 50
hours
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 per
week
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 are spent in each household washing clothes, preparing meals, or cleaning. The number of
hours
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 per
week
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 experienced a downward trend for the next 40
years
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 and
then
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 it reached the result that 20 per
week
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 spent on chores. Despite being stabilized for the following 59
years
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, the minority point was observed in 2019, when people wasted only 10
hours
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 per
week
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 cleaning their houses.
Overall
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, the provided data indicates that the ownership of electrical appliances and the time allocated to household chores were inversely proportional.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, hours, week, period, percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "examined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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