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The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The line graph illustrates the information regarding the ratio of senior citizens,who are older than 65 years in three various nations namely the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 from 1940 and
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 gives projections till 2040 .The data is calibrated in percentage.
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 will have a maximum number of people who are aged 65 and above in 2040 as compared to the other two nations. At a fleeting glance,the
USA
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 had the highest proportion of aged people in 1980 which was 15% as compared to the other two nations.The ageing population in the
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 grew steadily and reached up to 15% in the year 1980.Interestingly,in
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 the ratio of old citizens grew from about 7% in 1940 to 15 % in 2000 and is heading towards 25% in 2040.
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,the aged population in
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 remained at the lowest which was less than 5% until 2005 and is expected to grow and reach the highest point
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 30% in 2040. Moving ahead,in 2000 ,
Sweden
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 and
Japan
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 both showed an upward trend
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 to the
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.In 2040,
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 grow expected to be 25% which is less than
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 by 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, sweden, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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