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Overpopulation in the country is a serious issue that has given rise to numerous problems. Elaborate on one or two serious issues and give a plausible solution for them that governments can implement.

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people
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 say that the
population
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 has been increasing
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 by
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 and it would be very precarious for the
country
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. The above
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 in the
country
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 is a dangerous problem that has given rise to plenty of
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.
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 elaborate on major
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 and possible solutions. To get the ball rolling, the
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 is increasing
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 by
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 and it would be very hazardous for the
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 because
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overpopulation unemployment rate has
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 been increasing. Owing to
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,
people
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 do not get
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 and without a job surviving life is very difficult.
People
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 have their families and they have to earn money for their families and without a job it is impossible to fulfil their family’s needs.
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, the inflation rate has skyrocketed because of
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 and an increment is witnessed in all products.
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, a bunch of personages believe that living life in
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 modern era is very difficult because of the increasing
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. In
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 contemporary era, traffics on the street and accidents on the roads are increasing and
people
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 are facing many types of difficulties during travelling time. On the paradoxical side, governments should start seminars on awareness of the
population
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. In doing so,
people
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 can get information about how overpopulation is affected in our lives. Government should implement a
population
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 growth control policy. In which parents can give birth to only one or two children. Owing to
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, the
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 would decrease
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 and it would be very fruitful for the
country
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 and for the
country
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’s
people
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. Stating the compendium,
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, governments are implementing new rules
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 by
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,
people
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 failed to follow rules. The above monograph has propounded major
problems
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 and how we can tackle these
problems
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 very effectively.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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