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The graph below shows the number of tourists visit a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visit a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the number of
people
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 who visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. It
also
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 expresses the millions of
tourists
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 staying on a cruise
ship
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 and on an
island
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.
It is clear that
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 the total number of
tourists
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 increased continuously during 8 years.
Although
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 the figure of
people
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 staying on a
ship
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 is higher than those staying on an
island
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 in 2010, it becomes reverse after 2016. In 2010, 1
million
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tourists
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 visit a particular Caribbean
island
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. Among them, 0.75
million
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 stay on it
while
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 0.25
million
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 stay on a cruise
ship
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.
Then
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,
people
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 who came to the
island
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 went up and reached 1.5
million
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 in 2012.
However
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, those
people
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 who stayed on it remained at the same level until 2011 and increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. Meanwhile, the figure for visitors staying on a
ship
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 fluctuates between 0.25
million
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 to 0.5
million
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 from 2010 to 2013.
Then
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, there was a significant rise in the total number of
tourists
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 from 1.5
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 in the following years.
On the other hand
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, the millions of
tourists
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 staying on a
ship
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 was stable at 1.5
million
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 and those staying on the
island
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 rose obviously to about 1.5
million
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. In 2015, the latter took over the former at 1.4
million
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 and
finally
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 reached 2
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island, tourists, ship, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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