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The graph below shows the number of tourists visit a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visit a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the number of
people
 who visited a particular Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. It
also
 expresses the millions of
tourists
 staying on a cruise
ship
 and on an
island
.
It is clear that
 the total number of
tourists
 increased continuously during 8 years.
Although
 the figure of
people
 staying on a
ship
 is higher than those staying on an
island
 in 2010, it becomes reverse after 2016. In 2010, 1
million
tourists
 visit a particular Caribbean
island
. Among them, 0.75
million
 stay on it
while
 0.25
million
 stay on a cruise
ship
.
Then
,
people
 who came to the
island
 went up and reached 1.5
million
 in 2012.
However
, those
people
 who stayed on it remained at the same level until 2011 and increased to 1.5
million
 in 2013. Meanwhile, the figure for visitors staying on a
ship
 fluctuates between 0.25
million
 to 0.5
million
 from 2010 to 2013.
Then
, there was a significant rise in the total number of
tourists
 from 1.5
million
 to 3.5
million
 in the following years.
On the other hand
, the millions of
tourists
 staying on a
ship
 was stable at 1.5
million
 and those staying on the
island
 rose obviously to about 1.5
million
. In 2015, the latter took over the former at 1.4
million
 and
finally
 reached 2
million
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island, tourists, ship, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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