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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people. who lost their jobs because of it.

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In
this
 Contemporary era, the trend of
shoping
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shopping
 online become prevailing at an alarming pace across the world.
However
, it put
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 bad effect on
environment
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the environment
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as well as
majority
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the majority
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 of individuals
are
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loosing
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 their work opportunities
due to
this
 updated trend.
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this
 going the
upcomming
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upcoming
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 in
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, online
shoping
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shopping
 produces
large
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 amount of
wastage
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 that leads to
put
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 bad impact on
environment
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the environment
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. To elaborate on
this
,
online
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the online
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 market always provides a perfect
pakaging
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packaging
 to things. before it
selling
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 out and the plastic
the
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they utilize for
wraping
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wrapping
totally
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 cheap and
do
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not biodegradable
that
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 Contributes to the rubbish. around The cities.
For instance
, Flipkart
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, as well as the world Amazone,
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as well as
 the world Amazone sell out their
padults
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adults
 across and
plastic
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the plastic
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pakaging
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packaging
 they always
makes
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 use of that leads to
enviromental
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environmental
 obstacles
Consequently
, plastic remainings always to give birth leads Ab hazardous
diseases
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 and becomes a Cause of contamination of
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.
On the other hand
 along posing
dangerous
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 side. effect
to
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environment
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the environment
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 it is becoming
cause
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a cause
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 of unemployment.
In other words
, e-market leads. to reduce shaping malls. physical
markert
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market
 shops and other small outlets because
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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 always liked to shop in
theirI
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their
 comfort
done
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zone
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instead
 of visiting physically
to
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shops. so,
this
 fashion of purchasing
lead
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leads
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recruitment
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to recruitment
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 from massive shopping malls due. 9 to decrease to
insufficient
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an insufficient
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 load of pus chasers.
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. majority of folks
focauses
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focuses
focused
 throughout the world on e-marketing
website
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websites
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. Buch as, Amazone that provides sufficient offers to people in
the'll
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the
 rest Jone but
this
 attributes to
removal
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the removal
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 of small. shops as well
CLA
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 little businesses. In conclusion,
Although
this
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luxurious
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the luxurious
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 feeling of buying things but It leads to detrimental
of
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surrounding
as well as
intally
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initially
mentally
. jobs of daily wagers.
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