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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a contentious problem that many people are wanting to utilize public
transportation
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 like buses, taxis and metro on
vehicle-free-days
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vehicle-free days
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 and whether there are more advantages. Definitely, there are more metrics when public
transportation
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 is used
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 of personal vehicles for many reasons. First and foremost, that may promote
reduction
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 of pollution. The polluted smoke by vehicles
pose
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 a risk demetric to people's health.
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, the decrease
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 people controlling vehicles facilitates considerable advantages to health.
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, vehicle-free days may prevent everyone from traffic jams and congestion, which cause many individuals to go to work late.
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, it is said that private
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 being banned may cause some bad issues. In detail, some emergent situations like business, medical or burning need private
transportation
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. I reckon that there are more advantages than drawbacks. But from my perspective, the government needs to consider
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 problem because of some emergent
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 in vehicles-free days.
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