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Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free in their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

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There are two types of wearing for
workers
 which are uniform and formal clothes.
Therefore
,
people
 have different opinions on
this
 issue. In
this
 ,essay I will discuss the two views of what the
workers
 may to wearing and why. The first side of the opinion is about wearing a uniform. There are many different
reasons
that
Correct word choice
why
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 some
people
 prefer
workers
 to wear uniforms. One of the main
reasons
 is the nature of the
job
. Many jobs prefer
workers
 to wear their uniforms like doctors and who are working in a hospital. Because of the nature of the work need them to feel more comfortable in their work. The second reason is to save money. They thought that wearing specific clothes is a good choice to save money and they do not need to buy a lot of clothes like working in the supermarket or mall. The other side of the view is about wearing their choice. Most
people
 claim that view for many
reasons
. One of the
reasons
 is wearing what is more suitable for them.
Thus
, they can wear what they prefer and wear different styles.
For instance
, the
job
 of a teacher is one of these works because they feel more free in their choice.
To sum up
, there is no doubt that the views of
people
 are not the same and they are
according to
 the nature of the
job
. In my opinion in
this
 issue, I believe
workers
 should follow the rules of the
job
 if it is required to wear a uniform or not.
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